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Revisions; Rejections; Hubris
Nov. 24th, 2007 03:05 pmWell, Mistoreth's Eyes came back rejected from Apex and Abyss.
The comments are fun.
I wish you the best success in placing your story elsewhere, and hope to
see more of your work.
The first few sentences are quite lyrical, but the last sentence of the
first paragraph is unfortunately hilarious and breaks that illusion
(forget for a moment that The Farmer's Wife is an inn, and read the
sentence with the title as regular words).
After that, the feel of the piece changes -- it's no longer the poetic
piece it started as, so this needs some revision.
I did go back and read that, and yup, the name of the inn will have to change. Oh dear.
You know, when I wrote the first piece, it was a river. Then, I revised it into something else. Sometimes if you try to turn a piece into something it isn't, you can break the original spirit of the piece.
Well. Won't be coming back to that one anytime soon. I've got a lot to do before I'll have time to play with that again.
***
As to Substance, I've whacked out about 7000 words. Some of that hurt, but it wasn't exactly related to the main story. No more Welkins Menagerie scene. No more Hamwich family scene. No more warm and fuzzy Klarion family scenes. I liked them, but I don't think they need to be in there. Missing them doesn't detract from the story. You still get the idea of the piece with all those scenes off camera, and the characters still exhibit those qualities.
What this does mean, though, is I probably will go a little further with my original source material, and rewrite the Stephan unbound scenes. Stay tuned. Because I've whacked 7000 words out of the first six chapters, and I don't know how much more I'll whack out of the remaining ones.
At any rate, I've whacked through chapter six. I'll continue whacking, add a couple more relevant scenes for the ending, and then read things with a roller coaster meter to make sure the action is rising.
And if it's rejected again, well, we're no farther behind than we were before.
Time for Christmas decorating.
Catherine
The comments are fun.
I wish you the best success in placing your story elsewhere, and hope to
see more of your work.
The first few sentences are quite lyrical, but the last sentence of the
first paragraph is unfortunately hilarious and breaks that illusion
(forget for a moment that The Farmer's Wife is an inn, and read the
sentence with the title as regular words).
After that, the feel of the piece changes -- it's no longer the poetic
piece it started as, so this needs some revision.
I did go back and read that, and yup, the name of the inn will have to change. Oh dear.
You know, when I wrote the first piece, it was a river. Then, I revised it into something else. Sometimes if you try to turn a piece into something it isn't, you can break the original spirit of the piece.
Well. Won't be coming back to that one anytime soon. I've got a lot to do before I'll have time to play with that again.
***
As to Substance, I've whacked out about 7000 words. Some of that hurt, but it wasn't exactly related to the main story. No more Welkins Menagerie scene. No more Hamwich family scene. No more warm and fuzzy Klarion family scenes. I liked them, but I don't think they need to be in there. Missing them doesn't detract from the story. You still get the idea of the piece with all those scenes off camera, and the characters still exhibit those qualities.
What this does mean, though, is I probably will go a little further with my original source material, and rewrite the Stephan unbound scenes. Stay tuned. Because I've whacked 7000 words out of the first six chapters, and I don't know how much more I'll whack out of the remaining ones.
At any rate, I've whacked through chapter six. I'll continue whacking, add a couple more relevant scenes for the ending, and then read things with a roller coaster meter to make sure the action is rising.
And if it's rejected again, well, we're no farther behind than we were before.
Time for Christmas decorating.
Catherine